Opinions on 2 Poems wrtten by someone who has never tried it before?

Very good! But THAT'S your idea of LOVE poems? Wow! I have to say if I was the object of your affection, I be outta there so fast your head would spin! They are dark and sinister, not to say a little gory. Whatever happened to Roses are red, violets are purple, sugar is sweet, and so is maple syrple. But you are good, and I hope your love does not go unrequited.