Any Thoughts/Opinions/Criticism for my poem?

Contrary to everyone else, I liked it. I would never be able to do that in any of mine. I can't even use rhyming in my poems. lol. I posted a question about my poetry too....so yeah. But this one was very creative....fun to read. I'm going to have to look up a few words.....but other than that I enjoyed it! Thanks for sharing!